Awesome feedback thaaanyan, way better than mine would have been... I only provide feedback because no one else does so I'm glad you're willing to!
I wrote this LA too sometime in the year (timed from memory), it's not great but I'll post it Callum if you want to read someone else's approach.
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The APG's recent report, insisting that all forms of mobile phone use by drivers should be banned, has sparked great controversy. David James, president of the National Organisation of Drivers, contends in his opinion article “Mobile Concerns” (published in the magazine “Driver”) that while hand-held phones should be banned, handsfree phones are both safe and necessary. Initially comparing hands-free phones with other “perfectly normal” actions, James then appeals to parental emotion with the importance of phones, following this by portraying the ban as unenforceable. James then suggests an alternative solution to decrease fatality: fixing roads. Thus, appealing to all Australians who are interested in driving, James argues that such a ban is “not going to help anyone”, rather other solutions should be unearthed.
Beginning with an informative tone, reflected in his balanced headline “Mobile Concerns”, James outlines the APG's report to provide context. Becoming more blunt in tone, James asserts that the proposed ban is “reactionary” and “completely unnecessary”. This positions the reader to see it as an extreme step, motivated not by logic but by haste and thoughtlessness. This undermines its credibility in the reader's mind. James then compares a hands-free phone to other “perfectly normal activities”, such as “singing”, “talking” or “looking”. As the audience would think it ridiculous and highly imposing to ban these, James attempts to make them view the ban as equally extreme and ridiculous. The accompanying image, a sharply focused silhouette of a driver using a hands-free phone, supports James' contention that “full concentration” is possible and hands-free phones are not dangerous. The crisp, undistracting outline, combined with the tautly stretched arm and straight head, suggests complete power, control and focus. James thus insinuates that hands-free phones do not detract from driver control and safety.
James' tone transforms to one of greater sympathy and emotion as his voice slows down to paint a “distressing” picture. The hypothetical anecdote with its second person “your”, draws the reader in and tugs at their heartstrings as they picture their own suffering. A “seven year old” appears vulnerable and helpless, especially when “upset” and in “hospital”. Through repetition of her “rings” on the phone, James portrays the situation as urgent and worrying, building a sense of alarm and distress in the reader. James then draws sharp contrast: with a hands-free phone, “appropriate action” is possible; without it, healing the situation is both “impossible” and “illegal”. This depicts a ban on hands-free phones as heartless and potentially dangerous: counter-productive, since the aim was in fact to decrease danger. James then appeals to the instinct in parents to care for and protect their child when they “most need” help. Heightening parental emotion, James insinuates that the “suffering” and “guilt” caused by this ban will be ongoing, as they will have to “live with it”. Especially for parents, then, James attempts to make hands-free phones appear necessary safeguards. Furthermore, James describes the issue as the “fate” of “law-abiding citizens”, implying to the reader (who would believe themselves to be “law-abiding”) that they, who do not deserve punishment, will have to suffer by this ban.
James' tone once more becomes blunt as he illustrates that “some people” would disobey the law, in contrast to “law abiding” readers. By portraying the ban as “complicated” and “incredibly difficult” to enforce, James positions the reader to view the ban with contempt as it is impossible to enforce. A rhetorical question, querying “how easy it would be to differentiate” between other activities and a hands-free phone forces the reader to see the impossibility, and therefore uselessness, of the ban, as well as suggesting that hands-free phones are just as harmless as these similar activities.
Attempting to appear balanced and understanding, the author states agreement with the aim of decreasing “fatalities and injuries”. This enhances James' credibility in the reader's mind. Providing “a more logical focus”, James proposes fixing roads. Description of “pot-holes” and “poor shoulders”, culminating in the word “treacherous”, positions the reader to see road condition as significantly more dangerous than “perfectly normal” hands-free phones. While furthering his appearance of balanced credibility by admitting the cost of this solution, James portrays this as a necessary sacrifice “if our roads are to be safe” - subtly implying that fixing roads is indeed the way to ensure safety.
James' conclusion reiterates the vital nature of phones in our “daily life”, positioning the reader to see them as necessary and helpful as they provide “security”, “peace of mind” and “contact'. Admitting the benefits of banning handheld phones and trying to reduce road toll, James nonetheless argues that “banning handsfree mobile phones is not going to help anyone”. The reader is left viewing such a ban as not only useless, but even in some ways destructive to safety.
EDIT: on reading this LA, it's not great (~7 maybe) because a) it's very brief, like 750 words, and b) it just doesn't go all that much into impact on audience! Sorry!